Sunday, April 24, 2005

ALIBI (FICTION)


This is a disturbing piece of fiction that I wrote recently.
It is supposed to be in the genre of dark humour.
It has certain bizarre and intended uses of violence.
Do read it and give in your views, but note you have been warned.

5 comments:

  1. The story is written well and not like the unintelligible(not sure if this is the right word) 'concept boundary'(it was written to be outside the boundary).The thoughts are really good and looking into the future very well.Cyber was a interesting character.I like the way how u narrated people reacting at different situations.Ex:'His wife stared at him as if ashamed at the imbecility of the whole thing
    and kept nibbling nonchalantly, also stuffing some bits into her son's mouth, now and
    then'.RFID tag stuff was good.Anti-Radio helmet + mobiles at 2025 doesn't seem good.At such an advanced age people should be wearing nothing extra. But overall the story is not strong'Kahani mein Dum nahi hai'.Looking forward for a very dumdaar story.Wonderful narration, language and the style.No complaints at all.
    --Amrut

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  2. I didn't find this disturbing at all and I don't think it falls in the category of dark humour, maybe in the supernatural; I can relate this to the film "Omen".

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  3. Amrut: I understand what you mean by 'dum nahi hai' I too felt the same. I guess its an effect - as I was trying my hand at an alternate genre for the first time ...

    Sandeep: Supernatural? But I did not mean it to be so ... ! It is bizarre but supposed to convey the bizarre life that people lead nowadays.

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  4. Amrut : 'Wonderful narration, language and the style.No complaints at all'
    Thanks - should improve on that.

    Sandeep: How was it related to 'Omen' ? I have not seen it ...

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  5. Gregory Peck is the ambassador to the United States who's wife has a stillborn child. Without her knowledge, he substitutes another baby as theirs. A few years go by, and then grisly deaths begin to happen. The child's nanny hangs herself and a priest is speared to death in a freak accident. It turns out the child is the son of Satan and can only be killed with the seven daggers of Meggado.
    source: http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0075005/plotsummary

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